Banya, revisited

This is my newest draft.

123-yermolayeva2.doc

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2 thoughts on “Banya, revisited

  1. Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # 2

    Writer Marina Yermolayeva Peer Respondent Nicholas King

    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    Good descriptions
    This almost like an advertisement

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)

    Prices are not explained

    (?) Questions?

    Did you go just for the essay or did you go for leisure?
    Is it expensive?

  2. Notes for Peer’s Oral Response

    Essay # _2____

    Writer ____Marina______ Peer Respondent ____Tiasia Currie____

    Instructions: Listen to the essay carefully. Take at least two minutes after the reading to complete the following notes, and then share your reactions orally with the writer. Submit the completed form to your teacher at the end of the Peer Response activity.

    (+) What works? (praise)

    The introduction was very clever.
    The great description of the many places.
    The conclusion, it sums everything up, but in a rapid, yet strong way.
    The information you provided about the history of bathhouses.

    (-) What Doesn’t (polish)
    I enjoyed reading about the history, but I thought maybe you could have scattered it about, where ever it fit in, rather than putting it in the middle of the essay.

    (?) Questions?

    How much does it actually cost?
    What was the price when it first opened?
    If there was a change in the prices, why was this, and how much was the change?

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